Well, in revising my fiction I found it pretty easy over all and I picked two main feed backs that I felt confident in which they knew what they were talking about in respects to grammar and tense. I believe those two things are the main things I needed to focus on because I was so grounded into my initial vision of the story. A common criticism I received was that more dialogue was needed, especially with her parents but I purposely made them seem almost distant and away because they are mysterious and later their mysteriousness becomes a huge part of the story and basically the main conflict that the main character must over come. As far as changes in the story, I tried taking a couple elements that did not add up and changed small things here and there, specifically speaking about making her parents more obvious that they are two celebrities out in the business now and with the walk to her father's side of the home, in which she walks in on him mid-ritual and I think it might have made it more believable in how shocked she was and how out of the ordinary it was to her. I also changed the figure the father was chanting to because it alluded a little more to theme of Illuminati.
Overall the process was pretty easy as I stated as I did not change much around because I was so grounded in the images I chose and how they relate back to something that is rumored in society now and would create an eerie realm in which the story "could" be real, based on rumors and the fact that the characters stand in real life characters we have now, but I also took them into my realm in my mind and made them do what I wanted to make a story out of it. All the input was greatly appreciated but most people did not understand the correlation to pop culture now so some things I did not want to change that others said I should.
